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  • bimmer206
    Wrencher
    • Mar 2010
    • 237

    #1

    Critique My History Essay!

    Causes of the USSR vs. Afghanistan conflict

    Although there were many underlying causes leading to the beginning of the Soviet-Afghanistan conflict the main causes of Russia’s 10 year Vietnam were geographical, social, and political. It is difficult to place the whole weight of the war on one factor, it makes more sense that multiple underlying causes lead to the beginning of this bloody conflict because of the complexity and multitudes of parties (including the U.S.) involved in Russia’s attempted occupation of Afghanistan.
    I’ll begin with the geographic elements that lead to the beginning of the soviet afghan conflict. CNN writes, “In the 1970’s Afghanistan became a focus for super power rivalry.” This is because Afghanistan was close to the Persian Gulf Oil, and the Indian Ocean ports which made it a prime geographic location for Middle East interests. North of Afghanistan was the Soviet Union’s Central Asian Republics which to Moscow made a peaceful Afghanistan vital. All these factors made Afghanistan prime real-estate for the Russians to want to move in and take over.
    In 1978 a military coup instated a new president who looked to the Soviet Union for support, which brings me to my next factor: Political. During the 70’s the cold war was causing intense pressure between the U.S. and Soviet Union. Jon Krakauer author of Where Men Win Glory writes, “The chaos was sparked by accelerating friction between political groups within Afghanistan, but fuel for the conflagration was supplied in abundance and with great enthusiasm by the governments of the United States and the Soviet Union as each maneuvered to gain advantage in the cold war.” Afghanistan’s population although living within Afghanistan did not answer to a central government, but rather to local mullahs and tribal leaders. This made the different Afghan tribes and sects very prone to violence towards each other because in a sense they were their own individual states within the borders of Afghanistan. The Soviets realized that the U.S. had a lot of influence in the Middle East and that the Americans were indirectly supplying ths insurgents with weapons. The soviets sought to regain some of their hold over that area and thought that Afghanistan given its geological location and newly instated soviet friendly president would be the perfect place to start.
    The last main factor to the soviet afghan war was the social and customary beliefs of the Afghani people. The newly instated President Mohammed Daoud was pushing to modernize Afghanistan. Krakauer writes, “Presdient Daoud… supported this shift toward secular modernity as long as it didn’t threaten his hold on power.” Krakauer also writes, “In the end, alas, his policies placated a few and managed to antagonize almost everyone else most significantly the Soviets, the urban leftists, and the bearded fundamentalists in the country-side. This means that the Afghan people were not ready for the quick change into the modern world, in fact, they rebelled against it. Daoud’s foolish fashion brought up the PDPA (People’s Democratic Party of Afghanistan) which subsequently killed Daoud and his family. Immediately the PDPA took control of the country and within twenty months their ruthless tactics at controlling Afghanistan had sparked an all out civil war. Soon the PDPA was calling on the Soviets for help asking again and again for troops for support in Afghanistan. In 1979 the Soviets dispatched 100,000 troops to Afghanistan to “quell the rebellion, prop up the PDPA, and protect their cold war interests in that region” little did they know they were about to start a costly and pointless war killing hundreds of thousands of young soviet conscripts and over a million Afghanis.
    In conclusion there wasn’t a single all encompassing event that lead to the start of this costly war. In truth many different beliefs and objectives all interconnected to form a solid mesh of chaos that would engulf Afghanistan to this day. The main reasons to this conflict are due to the geographic properties of Afghanistan, the political objectives of the Soviet Union, and the customs of the Afghan people. In the end the Soviet vs. Afghanistan war brought a crashing fall to the Iron Curtain at the cost of many Afghan lives.
  • jasonsnoddy
    E30 Mastermind
    • Feb 2010
    • 1900

    #2
    i am not going to read this. besides, who are you kidding, posting your hmwk on r3v. no good will come of this i tell you!


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    • Bishop
      R3V Elite
      • May 2009
      • 4913

      #3
      Seriously, I didn't read it.... yet, but when I saw the title I instantly thought of how to bash it / you.... I'm not an asshole.. I swear it

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      Originally posted by DTM190
      "fuck the kangaroo dude, his toilet water swirls the wrong way anyway, plus i never liked crocodile dundee or Steve Irwin and vegemite tastes like shit"

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      • bimmer206
        Wrencher
        • Mar 2010
        • 237

        #4
        Oh... hurt feelings. Maybe one of you might learn something before you open your mouths about those dam terrorists. Its not long, i thought i might get some input.

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        • Bishop
          R3V Elite
          • May 2009
          • 4913

          #5
          I'll read it, but how old are you and what grade is this for?.... Give us some more info on the class and shit...

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          Originally posted by DTM190
          "fuck the kangaroo dude, his toilet water swirls the wrong way anyway, plus i never liked crocodile dundee or Steve Irwin and vegemite tastes like shit"

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          • bimmer206
            Wrencher
            • Mar 2010
            • 237

            #6
            Sophmore History essay regarding what caused the Soviet/Afghanistan war in 1979.

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            • aaron325ix
              E30 Fanatic
              • Jun 2007
              • 1489

              #7
              I didnt read it, but i did notice you mispelled damn in one of your replys. just saying.
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              • bimmer206
                Wrencher
                • Mar 2010
                • 237

                #8
                Ha dont you know thats how all the kids talk these days. most seattle kids use the adjective hella all the time.

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                • aaron325ix
                  E30 Fanatic
                  • Jun 2007
                  • 1489

                  #9
                  go to bed junior.
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                  • mrsleeve
                    I waste 90% of my day here and all I got was this stupid title
                    • Mar 2005
                    • 16385

                    #10
                    Thats an essay for a grade??? I type longer responses to the hippies and commies on this forum
                    Originally posted by Fusion
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                    • aaron325ix
                      E30 Fanatic
                      • Jun 2007
                      • 1489

                      #11
                      Originally posted by mrsleeve
                      Thats an essay for a grade??? I type longer responses to the hippies and commies on this forum
                      ^^ he speaks the truth. I was thinking the same thing
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                      • Bishop
                        R3V Elite
                        • May 2009
                        • 4913

                        #12
                        Originally posted by bimmer206
                        Causes of the USSR vs. Afghanistan conflict

                        Although there were many underlying causes leading to the beginning of the Soviet-Afghanistan conflict, the main causes of Russia’s 10-year Vietnam were geographical, social, and political. It is difficult to place the whole weight of the war on one factor, but it makes more sense that multiple underlying causes led to the beginning of this bloody conflict because of the complexity and multitudes of parties, including the United States, involved in Russia’s attempted occupation of Afghanistan.
                        I’ll begin with the geographic elements that lead to the beginning of the soviet afghan conflict. CNN writes, “In the 1970’s, Afghanistan became a focus for super power rivalry.” This is because Afghanistan was close to the Persian Gulf Oil (deleted comma) and the Indian Ocean ports which made it a prime geographic location for Middle East interests. North of Afghanistan was the Soviet Union’s Central Asian Republics, which to Moscow, made a peaceful Afghanistan vital. <- wut? All these factors made Afghanistan prime real-estate for the Russians to want to move in and take over.
                        In 1978, a military coup instated a new president who looked to the Soviet Union for support, which brings me to my next factor, which is political. During the 70’s the Cold War was causing intense pressure between the United States and the Soviet Union. Jon Krakauer, author of "Where Men Win Glory," writes, (I think you may wanna delete this comma, but not entirely sure) “The chaos was sparked by accelerating friction between political groups within Afghanistan, but fuel for the conflagration was supplied in abundance and with great enthusiasm by the governments of the United States and the Soviet Union as each maneuvered to gain advantage in the Cold War.” Afghanistan’s population, who was living within the country, did not answer to a central government, but rather to local Mullahs and tribal leaders. This made the different Afghan tribes and sects very prone to violence towards each other because in a sense they were their own individual states within the borders of Afghanistan. The Soviets realized that the United States had a lot of influence in the Middle-East and that(I'd try deleting "that" cause I don't think it fits in well) the Americans were indirectly supplying this insurgency with weapons. The Soviets sought to regain some of their hold over that area and thought that Afghanistan, given its geological location and newly instated Soviet friendly president, would be the perfect place to start.
                        The last main factor to the Soviet-Afghan war was the social and customary beliefs of the Afghani people. The newly instated president, President Mohammed Daoud, was pushing to modernize Afghanistan. Krakauer writes, “Presdient Daoud… supported this shift toward secular modernity as long as it didn’t threaten his hold on power.” Krakauer also writes, “In the end, alas, his policies placated a few and managed to antagonize almost everyone else most, significantly the Soviets, the urban leftists, and the bearded fundamentalists in the country-(delete the hyphen)side. This means that the Afghan people were not ready for the quick change into the modern world, in fact, they rebelled against it. Daoud’s foolish fashion brought up the PDPA (People’s Democratic Party of Afghanistan) which subsequently killed Daoud and his family. Immediately the PDPA took control of the country and within twenty months their ruthless tactics of controlling Afghanistan had sparked an all out Civil War. Soon the PDPA was calling on the Soviets for help, asking again and again for troops for support in Afghanistan. In 1979 the Soviets dispatched 100,000 troops to Afghanistan to “quell the rebellion, prop up the PDPA, and protect their Cold War interests in that region.” little did they know they were about to start a costly and pointless war killing hundreds of thousands of young Soviet conscripts and over a million Afghanis.
                        In conclusion, there wasn’t a single all encompassing event that lead to the start of this costly war. In truth, many different beliefs and objectives all interconnected to form a solid mesh of chaos that would engulf Afghanistan to this day. The main reasons to this conflict are due to the geographic properties of Afghanistan, the political objectives of the Soviet Union, and the customs of the Afghan people. In the end, the Soviet versus Afghanistan War brought a crashing fall to the Iron Curtain at the cost of many Afghan lives.
                        Boom... Look closely, most of it was grammatical shit...
                        Last edited by Bishop; 05-31-2010, 10:04 PM.

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                        Originally posted by DTM190
                        "fuck the kangaroo dude, his toilet water swirls the wrong way anyway, plus i never liked crocodile dundee or Steve Irwin and vegemite tastes like shit"

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                        • Bishop
                          R3V Elite
                          • May 2009
                          • 4913

                          #13
                          I also agree with most of the responses... It's definitely painfully evident what you did and did not write lol.

                          PM me for detailing services in the Longmont / Boulder Area in Colorado!
                          Originally posted by DTM190
                          "fuck the kangaroo dude, his toilet water swirls the wrong way anyway, plus i never liked crocodile dundee or Steve Irwin and vegemite tastes like shit"

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                          • ak-
                            R3V OG
                            • May 2009
                            • 12422

                            #14
                            Lol.

                            You should paypal Bishop a dollar or something.

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                            • mrsleeve
                              I waste 90% of my day here and all I got was this stupid title
                              • Mar 2005
                              • 16385

                              #15
                              Originally posted by Bishop
                              I also agree with most of the responses... It's definitely painfully evident what you did and did not write lol.
                              yes "conflagration" is not a normal word for a HS sophomore to know the meaning of let alone use in a essay. Thats an SAT word still isn't it????


                              Hey bishop, can I forward all my long drug out posts to you for Grammatical checks before I post them????


                              Jr you owe bishop a 10 spot.
                              Originally posted by Fusion
                              If a car is the epitome of freedom, than an electric car is house arrest with your wife titty fucking your next door neighbor.
                              The American Republic will endure until the day Congress discovers that it can bribe the public with the public's money. -Alexis de Tocqueville


                              The Desire to Save Humanity is Always a False Front for the Urge to Rule it- H. L. Mencken

                              Necessity is the plea for every infringement of human freedom. It is the argument of tyrants.
                              William Pitt-

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