Critique My History Essay!

[Bishop]

Lol.

You should paypal Bishop a dollar or something.

Does anyone wanna take a stab at how mind numbingly bored I am tonight... haha

yes "conflagration" is not a normal word for a HS sophomore to know the meaning of let alone use in a essay. Thats an SAT word still isn't it????

I believe you're right.... I don't think anyone will take it to the extent I did, but if anyone sees anything I missed, or disagree with a correction, please chime in

[bimmer206]

I liked the mix responses. Thanks bishop i owe you 1. I like to think im a little bit more advanced than a high school sophmore but thats just me. Im going to college next year.

[mrsleeve]

Does anyone wanna take a stab at how mind numbingly bored I am tonight... haha

I believe you're right.... I don't think anyone will take it to the extent I did, but if anyone sees anything I missed, or disagree with a correction, please chime in

I venture to say as bored as I am ??????

There are a few more in there I can point out too that came from encyclopedia interntz in the form of Ctr-V

[Bishop]

That's good, just don't be cocky or you'll get mind-fucked.... I'd suggest going over the paper, seeing if my corrections make sense, trying to understand WHY I made them, then take them and submit them / meet with the teacher before the due date to get their input... Then turn in the paper.... If you wanna succeed in school, don't slack or be lazy. The teacher is there to help you learn and shit, use it to your advantage.... Just.... Don't be cocky, apply yourself, and learn

[Bishop]

I venture to say as bored as I am ??????

I'm watching TV shows on DVD.... Compiling a list of what I need to get done tomrrow... Not tired in the slightest, even after driving for roughly 10 hours today

[bimmer206]

Thanks Bishop I appreciate it. I need to work on carefully re-reading.

[Bishop]

No problem, the locals know I'm a pretty cool guy, I guess a lot of people on here seem to think I'm a dick head though.

[bimmer206]

I agree with the locals. Alright i finished the paper, re-read it another 5 times, edited it some more, and turned it in as its due at 11:59. Do you know anyone selling fogs like the ones in your sig?

[Bishop]

Uh, me lol. But one is trashed and the other is "weathered"... I wanna get rid of em for some blanks since I don't use em.

[Desaevious]

TL;DR'd.